Clarificaton on Coulombe-Twain Essay - 3rd Draft

In order to earn the full 100 points for editing your essays:

 - You will make edits from my comments.  = 2nd Draft

 - Send that to whomever is your Peer Editor, making a 3rd Draft from that person's edits. 

That is what you'll e-mail or bring in on Wed. April 27. Total process = 100 points. Their e-mailed comments should be including in what you turn in with 

1. Original Draft

2. 2nd Draft (edits from my comments)

3. Peer Editor's comments - light yellow PE sheet filled out or e-mailed comments printed up

4. 3rd Draft

Sunday 4-24 = 4 updated book on Goodreads = 200 points

4-27-11 = 3rd Draft + other drafts  = 100 [+ 15 for those who scored extremely low on in-class essay]
4-27-11 = 5 Windows from first 150 pages of Ragtime.
For those on the college field trip, be sure to have work e-mailed to me before 5 p.m.
                           Peer Editing Checklist

Title of Essay__________________________ Edited by_____________________________date

Peer Editing Checklist

Before even picking up a pen or pencil, read the essay two (2) times through.

______Essay is in Standard MLA format (1” margins, Times New Roman, 12 font, Double Spaced

______Heading = NAME, DATE, Period and Teacher’s name (Single Spaced)

______Footer = Name—P4—Chasing American’s Dream

______# of ¶s

______Do all ¶s have 4-8 complete sentences on the same topic?

______Claim is clearly stated within Introduction ¶ Underline or HIGHLIGHT TS = CLAIM

______There are clear transitional sentences in________ ¶s

______This essay contains a variety of sentence structures = short simple punchy to

more compound, even complex sentences. 

  Ex: Calvin is Hip-Hop. He embodies the culture right down to the false and potentially deadly persona of tough Black man, aka Thug aka Burn. This is seen in his seemingly rational desire to gain “props” or respect by buying and then flashing a gun in another young black male’s face, one whom had allegedly disrespected his “women” verbally. Calvin is deluded.

______ Scholar has cited facts and evidence with explications (line or stanza #s OR page 3#s) from ALL SOURCES REQUIRED

______Counter CLAIM[s] have also be introduced and clarified with specific cited sources

______Conclusion is powerful, not repeating the T.S. exactly, however driving home writer’s

opinions.

______At least 10 vocabulary words have been used correctly according to part of speech.

Additional Comments:

“We learn more by looking for the answer to a question and not finding it than we do from learning the answer itself.” ~ Lloyd Alexander